Last week, Oscar and Callum in Year 6 emailed me some examples of the narrative writing they have been producing. Please read extracts of their work below:
A NEWFOUND FRIEND
Ellie stood behind me, trembling and
pleading me to leave the deserted horror we were blindly facing. I felt
my hand also shuddering with the rising fear, burning my insides but
then I turned the corner after moments of life-threatening hesitation.
Finally, I too felt we had to go home to mother; she’d be worried sick
by now. As I left, the fear trickled out of me as a wave of relief
entered and took over my mind…
When we reached the broken down cottage
that we called home, Ellie and I were both panting. I followed the
cobbled path as it swayed around the elegant beech trees, glistening
leaves gliding swiftly to the floor around my very feet.
Seeing the door slamming itself on the wall
in the wind was a horrifying surprise. We decided to go and check if
mother was ok. Slowly and cautiously, we entered the wreck. Floorboards
creaked. The moon sparkled. Worry filled my body. Ellie was now
clenching my hand with her tightest grip; although I couldn’t feel my
hand, I knew she was there, I could hear her teeth chattering.
Callum Oliver
WHEN FROST FREEZES
A man in a black tuxedo slowly walked
down his stairs. He was cold-hearted. His face was scarce of emotion. This man,
was Thierry Zidane. Thierry starred in many films and had earned billions
of euros in the process. However, Thierry Zidane was no ordinary actor as they were about to find out.
A bald headed man was awaiting him at
the bottom of the never ending stairs holding out a glass of shandy. A black
Land Rover pulled up in the pebble stone drive “He’s ready to do business sir”
the bald headed man murmured.
Oscar Frost
Looking forward to reading more from both of you!
Well done boys.
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